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Okay, sorry for the rather stale title lol. I just thought I would start this as I gained a recent interest in poetry. And this is well, my very first poem ever, and I thought I would share it with you guys. Enjoy:
Always. The years go by But you made it all better You were there for me when others weren’t Waiting, always waiting. But that on night, everything changed The pictures haunt me still Like a spirit, you persist and persist Hallowing, wondering and always finding your way back The pictures on my wall grow weary and tired Tired from the memories that made it all worthwhile. Good things in life were hard to find you said You were never hard to find, you were there, always. All good things come to an end The end was too close, and you were too far. Memories are all I have left. Shattered memories.
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You showed me this over MSN.. I absolutely love it, to be honest.
Especially considering it's your first poem.. Wow. It sounds nice.. Flows beautifully, your choice of words is lovely, and it doesn't feel like it's trying too hard to have perfect rythm, as alot of first poems seem to. Very nice. Can't wait to see more.
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Thanks Froggie. Got another one I wrote while I should have been doing my english assignment. Comment and tell me what you guys think. Positive and Negative comments are welcome.
Waves The salty sandbanks, drifting, slowly The fish, swimming The dolphins, riding The jellyfish, floating Through the waves without a care in the world The sun goes down The once silent waves thrash and crack like lightning The sandbanks are no more Only a lonely gutter, destroyed from the ravage of the waves The sharks, waiting for their prey The blue bottles, waiting for their victim Stingrays, waiting, just waiting to impale. Through the vicious waves with a meaning of ill intent The sun comes up once again The waves return to the calm, delicate way they were The sand banks slowly drift back into the place they call home And I swim. Swim through the waves without a care in the world.
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As I've said on MSN dude, these are both really good. The first one shows how much potential you have for that being your first poem ever. Your selecion of imagery is really amazing. You got some talent there.
The second I like a lot. Could definitely be a song you wanna play at the beach. Just put some words of girls in bikinis or without them.This pwns half the mainstream music out there. I expect some reward for proposing this rockin idea. ![]()
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Thanks Dimi. I got another one I made up when I was playing Zelda. Your thoughts and comments would be appreciated ^^.
Ruler of the Kingdom: Mighty ruler Sword and shield drawn Ready for the battle That will change his life at dawn The battlefield Innocent lives lost Blood over his cherished land It came at a cost 10 years he was told To set things right Forever in the shadows Forever continuing the fight 10 years past But he never saw the light Only to realize it was a fleeting dream In the end, there was nothing to fight
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I love your poems. I dunno why really, I just do. First ones I actually paid attention to. Which means...that you've obviously caught my attention.
![]() I particularly like the first poem. Same reason as Fishie. I just like the way they're written. They're nice. Keep at it!
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haha The Zelda one is awesome dude. This gave me a picture in LoZ
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