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06-17-2006, 06:21 AM
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Here is a poem a wrote a while ago when I was going through a good relationship.It's one of my happier poems.It's also one of the best I have written.
I want to hold onto you tight As we glide across the floor In each other’s arms in the moonlight. Hand in hand, Your hazel eyes locked onto mine, Sweet lips unite, As we dance in the moonlight. A lovers embrace As sweet lips unite, Feet dancing across the floor, Arms locked tight I fight to keep dancing, Your kiss makes me weak As we glide across the floor in the moonlight.
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06-24-2006, 09:58 AM
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As a whole, I love the poem. It is very sweet. It has some rough spots, but overall it isn't bad at all.
Anything else of yours you'd care to share? I'm anxious to see more from you!
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06-24-2006, 01:35 PM
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Nice poem. I deffinately got the imagery and the passion and the awkardness for typing this. You should add to it. More imagery more passion and hmm more awkardness for typing this.
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06-25-2006, 08:44 AM
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