Shikari the Frobidden Land

Ok, so I made a story, its action/adventure/romance/magic sort of theme. I hope you like it, its kinda long though.

http://www.fictionpress.com/read.php?storyid=2102954

Ok sorry for the double post but I want to get people's attention for my stroy =D.

Prologue

Long ago in an ancient civilization, there were ten precious relics. Endowed to the Negaidomen, from the gods and goddesses.

Life

Spirit

Strength

Speed

Mind

Endurance

Vision

Sound

Song

Luck

These relics apart, give their own unique abilities, but together they lead to a land called Shikari, the Land of Dreams and Desires, where a person can live happily. However there were those malicious in mind, and impure in heart, who strive to take that land as their own, and crush all hopes and dreams, to poision the Ambrosia of the waters, to destroy beauty of the lands, and to darken the skies. So the ancient sages locked these Relics away, keeping the world at peace...

Until now... Many evil beings have heard of these legends and have joined together to seek and destroy Shikari. But it is up to the adventurers of Negaido to stop them...

and maybe...

Be able to...

Visit...

Shikari the Forbidden Land.


So...tell me how it is? (I have more chapters, just waiting to see if people will like it.)