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**Andromeda** · 11-13-2006, 12:11 AM

Its been a rough day on me. I thought that since I beat FFXII last week that there would not be a problem with writing today. Unfortunately I played FFXII Friday and Saturday, making me remember how addicting that game really is. Well that left my straining my concentration across too many things. I am probably not going to be make the post for the episode tonight. I do have most of the completed, but I doubt that I can get it all down in time before I must force myself asleep. Who knows I might pull it off.

Either way, as I said I am reading through these episodes just feeling them along. And well, um. I think it is growing. I don't know it is sort of weird how the episode started. I knew what I was going to do and started it out. Then I got off on a tangent, that I think was worthwhile and well half of the episode is already finished and I really have not hit anything that I wanted. So I am guessing unless things change in the last couple pages the arc might get extended. Either way, I am feeling this out as I go, since I am trying to work out all of the threads I am holding right now.

Certain issues I want to resolve now are being drawn out. So I will see how it goes. I was expecting this episode to be a little more humorous than it is turning out. There is still time, but expect some rough stuff. Anyway, I leave you with the preview for the next episode.

"Hi all again. Kohana here in place of Chiko."

"And I'm Sakura filling in for Mashiro!"

"Sakura!"

"Kohana!"

"Sakura!"

"Kohana!"

Kohana suddenly is hit by something. "Owie!" Kohana begins to cry. "I'm sorry."

"What's wrong?"

"We were getting off topic. Sniff."

"You alright? Owie! Wahhhh!"

"Fine, be that way, you made Sakura run away. Well I am back in the next episode. You will get to see my adorable face more and I get to spend more time with Mashiro. I bet Chiko is going to be so jealous of me when he wakes up. The next episode of The Inner Man, Innocence!

"I'm cute too...but I don't want to say it. Make him say it. Oh fine. Don't miss it or Chiko will kick you in the shins. Tee hee! Owies! Wahhhh!"

**Andromeda** · 11-15-2006, 01:38 AM

I missed yesterday. I was actually trying to get it done, but I came to a realization yesterday. While I was staring at the screen unable to write I had 50 other things going through my mind. You combine that with apparently my sudden urge to sleep, I could hardly find two words to say. I ended up waking up around 2 am or something realizing that I had fallen asleep. It was then that I realized that I was just too busy in the mind to actually get anything done. It is all well and good to have ideas, but when that is all you have going on at a mile a minute, it does not leave enough room or time to cross the street. So probably sat staring at the screen for an hour or two unable to find the words to pick up.

I was afraid that I was not going to be able to finish it tonight, because I was sleepy again. Though I was also waiting on a call that I never got, so I delayed writing. Either way! I managed to get it down and finished, even if it is a little late.

This episode is well a little strange. As I said when I started it, it was meant to go on direction. And well it did, it just took that direction further and longer than I was planning. So I ended up with like seven pages of some really good stuff. I kept it, and that became the first half of the episode. The second half, I enjoyed a lot. Especially coming up with the last four pages. That was a lot of fun, I really enjoyed writing them. I think you guys should too.

Enjoy!

**Andromeda** · 11-26-2006, 11:07 PM

I sort of knew that I would not be able to make this deadline. I was told the day before that I had to ride shotgun to Chicago and back to take my sister back to college today. That sort of kills 7 hours of the day. The car ride was hard to concentrate, so I got nothing started there. I get home and guess what, I'm not feeling so hot.

I spent the next 30 minutes on the floor trying to settle that feeling out and then I started in on writing. The feeling really was not going away and I was developing a headache, so I popped in some FMP which managed to make me forget about the slight headache I had. That brought my concentration back and I managed to knock out a few a pages while being distracted by something else.

It also took me a bit to figure out where the episode was going to be heading, since I had the idea, but I wanted to change things since I did not like where it was going. So I changed things, I like the direction and things are pretty much flat out comedic right now. I'm pulling things from everywhere, but nothing is going pretty serious. Once it is finished, it should be a pretty entertaining episode, in spite of the rather serious nature of things. The episode title is subject to change, but I think it will stick.

Preview for the next episode:

"Hello, again. I'm back in place of Chiko. I'm so happy that I'm getting more screen time. I was so sad that I did not get to see daddy as much as Chiko did. But now I get him all to myself! I'm so happy now!"

"My precious girl!" the doctor says. "Daddy's here!"

"Hello, who are you?"

"Wha--!" There is crying in the background.

"What's wrong, mister?"

"Mister...waah."

"Hey, mister! Owie. Sorry, mister, but I'm forgetting the preview."

"Mister..."

"The next episode of The Inner Man, Pretend! I got a whole episode, yay! Don't missed it or you might want to watch out for falling bears! Tee hee!"

"Mister..."

**Andromeda** · 12-01-2006, 01:45 AM

I apologize for the delay. As I had said initially, I knew that I was not going to be able to get it all done on Sunday. I thought that I was going to be able to finish it Monday, but I did not get it all complete because I fell asleep. Then when I resumed Tuesday I got more completed, but still not all of it. When I Wednesday though, I sort of hit a different barrier. I was embarrassed. Its pretty silly, but I'm the type of person that has a hard time watching people make fools of themselves on TV. I literally plug my ears or go hide somewhere so I don't have to hear them sounding like an idiot or whatever. Its embarrassing in many ways.

Well I got embarrassing writing it, because there was parts that were so silly or whatever that the character was making a complete fool of themselves. So it was hard to watch and write. That sort of stalled me up for the rest of the night when I hit that. Then I was afraid that I was not going to finish it tonight, but I stayed up an hour longer to get it done and I'm happy that I did.

I had it all planned out more or less, I just needed to write it out. But lets just say that it is a completely comedic episode almost. There are only only two serious points in the entire episode almost. Everything else is crazy, wacky things that are happening that probably none of you are expecting. I'm you watched anime, so what I do should not be unusual, but up until this point the comedy elements were in a different tone. But the doctor is back, and I love his character so much that I could not resist having a ton of fun. Simply put, expect the unexpected.

This was one of my most enjoyable episodes to plan, not to write, but definitely to plan.

Enjoy! ^^

**Andromeda** · 12-10-2006, 08:23 PM

Well I'm working on the episode right now, and I'm hoping that provided there is not much delaying me tonight that I will actually be able to get the episode off without having to put it off. I already have almost half of it done which is pretty good for me. I was a little delayed in starting since I was watching something so I don't have as much time to screw around with. But I don't think it will be too much trouble for me this time.

The episode is going to be another lighthearted episode with a bit of action and plenty of drama as well. Sort of a well mixed blend of everything that you sort of come to expect at this point from the variety of episodes. I'm returning with more of the screwball humor that had found its way into the previous episode, but that will be toned back a lot. But this should be the conclusion to what began as the Mashiro Arc. I'm not so sure what to call it anymore, other than a Mashiro Arc since all of the episodes have been mainly from his point of view anyway. The original intention was to have a two episode arc that focused around Mashiro's past, but we are far beyond that now. It was a trigger for something in Chiko that reveal another side that had only been shown previously in short little glemses before. The side was always there in some fashion, just below the surface ready to pop up when there was a break only to fade away just as quickly.

Preview for the next episode:

"Kohana here once again, I'm still here. I hope you all enjoyed the exploits of the Magical Girl Kohana, because the entire episode will feature me!"

"Get real! Like we would give you a full episode for you," Mashiro says.

"What? You mean I'm not going to be in the next episode?"

"I didn't say that!"

"Wahhh!! I hate you!"

"Wa-what?! N-n-now take it easy, I'm sure we can work something out. Wahahah! Help!"

"Daddy...waah!"

"Well she's gone now. Don't miss the next episode of The Inner Man, Gemini! Car stunts, magical girls, crazy doctors and ruthless hitmen, you better not miss it!

"Where's my daughter?"

"Did I mention crazy doctors? Maybe Chiko will get to kick him again...hey that's your cue." The sound of things breaking and painful screams can be heard. "Err...why me...who made up this line anyway! Tee hee! I'm going to go kill myself now."

**Andromeda** · 12-11-2006, 03:22 AM

Well it is up now, finally. I did not know if I was going to make it tonight. I wanted to stop several times, but I pushed on through. I am going to take a big hit on my sleep for putting a rush job on this, but I think it was worth it. The episode turned out pretty good I think. There is a lot of funny moments as well as serious dramatic moments. There are even some good action scenes. I enjoyed the episode, it took 11 hours to finish, but I'm glad it is done. Now I move on to the next thing I need to handle.

Enjoy!

**Andromeda** · 01-06-2007, 05:42 PM

Well I have been out of it for a while, it is not easy to be writing the day before Christmas. Thus it was put off until later, and well I got games for Christmas. This means that I play them, and pretty much forget about just about anything else that exists including food. So well that just screwed me over completely and royally. Now two week later, I'm finally sitting down to write this out. I had started a few times, but I did not really get too far since I could not concentrate very well.

The games are all finished, so I do not have distractions and I actually have sleep, so I'm not falling over on my computer. With all of that worked out, I am working on a back to back episode writing event here ><. All that means is that you will be receiving Episode 15 and 16 one after the other without much of a delay between them like normal, since 15 should have been up two weeks ago. And well 16 should be up tomorrow, which is probably not going to be possible. I'll be still working on 15 today, and Sunday. So I'll be working on 16 immediately after that.

I will say that I am pretty excited about what is about to happen, since as I said the humorous episodes are coming to end. The whole doctor episodes were sort of a huge blowout of insane craziness to bring some conclusion to what began as a very serious, dramatic and depressing series of episodes. I had imagined a little more serious moment of talking between Mashiro and Chiko when it was all said and done, but that did not really happen in that episode. Not to mention that not everything was wrapped up completely in the last episode. So expect a few more pieces to be tied up in episode 15, but 15 is a pretty amusing episode with some serious points at times.

Also as I said, there is going to be more serious episodes coming that will all be leading up to the huge finale that is going to be coming. The start of that will begin in the next episode. It will sort of feel like it is a long series of connected episodes, and that will be intental at points. There are a lot of threads that I have to start fixing up since they have all been hanging out there. So expect the action and excitement to increase as things will get even more interesting as I get into the last ten episodes. I have a lot of big things planned out for it, so expect some surprises and unexpected twists.

And to leave you with that to think about, I have the preview for the next episode:

"Hey all, Kohana back here by popular demand to do the preview! I'm not going to be doing as much in the next episode, but there is something exciting that is going to happen. Oh, I can't wait to see how it goes. You see Chiko is-"

"What you think you are doing? This is my preview, I've been gone for so long and you are hijacking the preview now and not just my body!"

"But you said you couldn't stand to be in the same room as me let alone be here for the preview where you are-"

"Stop! I told you not to say it!"

"Say what?"

"What I told you not to say."

"But I haven't said it yet."

"Exactly, I have to stop you!"

"What? Then how will they know what is going to happen next?"

"Like I care about, I have what is left of my dignity to keep. Oh wait, the preview is almost over. Don't miss the next of episode of The Inner Man, Unspoken. It is unspoken for a reason, don't even utter a word."

"Chiko is going-"

"Shut up! Argh! You better not miss it, there is going to be plenty of kicking in the next episode! Tee hee! Now cut quickly!"

"Chiko is-"

**Andromeda** · 01-07-2007, 09:36 PM

Well it took longer than I was expecting to get finished, but I managed it. I still have the next episode to start writing. I already have an idea of what I am going to do, unfortunately I usually have more time between episodes to think about the up coming episode. Well I will figure out something.

I had a lot of leftovers as I said from the 6 episode run, and this episode pretty much cleans up the remaining things that I had from that arc. It actually took up a lot more of the episode than I thought, it was intended to be more of a filler episode. Anyway, the way it moves through should be interesting and changes a few things permenantly. So I will be having fun with that I know. It was an unexpected change, but I find those to be the most fun to play with.

Anyway, I will begin working on the 16th episode shortly. This is getting closer to the end so much faster than I was expecting. There is a little in the last the episode that starts up some new things. So there is some added mystery that should prove to be interesting as the episodes continue. I had much more in store, so I hope you keep on reading even if you are not commenting.

**Andromeda** · 01-13-2007, 04:06 PM

Well as I figured it was going to take a while, between work during the week and falling asleep the first few days there was not a lot done. It also took me a while to figure out a name of the episode. I was already halfway finished with the episode when I finally got a name I wanted for it. One reason I could not get up a preview for the next episode was because I did not know what to call it. Well I know now, so I can give a preview.

The other thing that I was sorting out what I wanted to put into this episode, because I knew what I wanted to do in the end, but there were a lot of things that I working on at the moment with the story so I needed to work the threads correctly. So there is a lot of tie ins that I am working on and I needed to know which ones that I wanted to use. I think overall that this will be a good episode, it is going more towards the drama, so expect some action and fights.

The preview for the next episode:

"Well I'm back in control finally. Gah, how long has it been since it was just the two of us doing a preview?"

"Tell me about it, a lot has happened since then."

"Yes, nothing is the same anymore."

"But there is still more to do, a trail to follow."

"Right, new things coming over the horizon. You think you can handle whatever it is that comes at us?"

"Don't worry, you got Mashiro!"

"And Kohana!"

"What are you doing here? This preview is just for Mashiro and me."

"Whaaaat?! But why? I want to do it with you too!"

"Grrr...I don't need you making matters worse for me!"

"Get her off me!"

"Hehe, one way to solve matters."

"Help me!"

"Oh wait, almost forgot about the preview. On the next episode of The Inner Man, Breadcrumbs. The trail has been followed for a while, where does it lead to?

"Trail huh? Getting all serious on me huh?"

"Yeah, we coming to the climax soon your body going to hold out?"

"As long as you don't kick me too much."

"Right, don't miss it. Who knows where the kicks will land! Tee hee!"

**Andromeda** · 01-14-2007, 09:54 AM

Well I finished the episode last night, but I needed a little sleep since I was waking up early. I also figured that I would be a little more alert to proof something in the morning rather than late at night. So I waited on posting it a few hours. But I managed to get the episode written, and now I just have a week to prepare for the next episode.

I definitely enjoyed writing the last eight pages of the episode because I had somethings planned, but there is some nice fight scenes there. So I think you will get a good blend of humor and action in the episode. There will not be much humor in the next episode, but you'll know why when you get to the end of this episode.

I've introduced some new threads that I will be working with, though they will only appear that they are new. I actually have been working with them for a while, but that will not be made clear for a while. Either way, there will be some new things on the horizon to look out for.

Enjoy.

**Andromeda** · 01-21-2007, 08:14 PM

Well here I am again after a week of posting the previous episode. I should be back on my schedule I think. I have naturally already begun working on the episode and about a third of the way through now I think, since most of the episodes have been turning out to be 15 pages in length lately. It was funny that before I was having trouble getting them to a length and now I am having trouble keeping them down to the right length.

The last episode was another cliffhanger, they seem to be getting pretty common now huh? Well it is new story arc that I am going through currently. It should only be a two episode arc this time, though there is a lot that I am setting up right now in the episode for the future ones to come. So it may not feel like it is just two episodes. The main threat will be wrapped up in this episode coming up.

Though expect more of these smaller two part arcs that will deal with different issues have since been laying around. There is still a lot more to come and this episode is pretty big on the plot development, though it may not really feel like it until you get into up coming episodes, since most of what happens in this episode will not make much sense until the ones that come later to explain things.

Preview for the next episode:

"I can't believe you let me get kidnapped! Again! How could you just let that happen to me. You're suppose to protect me you jerk!"

"Hey, don't blame it on me. You're the one that got yourself kidnapped walking home."

"What?! I always walk home."

"Exactly! Its like telling everyone come and get me I'm completely helpless."

"Why you! Get over here so I can beat you up!"

"But then who will save you?"

"I will!" Kohana says cheerfully.

"Er...isn't there something I should be doing?"

"You mean the preview?" Mashiro says.

"Right! Almost out of time too, the next episode of The Inner Man, Enemies. How many enemies do we have now?"

"I've lost track at this point."

"Hopefully I'll get to kick some people around for kidnapping me. I'll take down all of our enemies. You better not miss it! Tee hee!"

"You know I'll never get used to that coming out of your mouth."

"You're telling me."

"Hey! What about me?" Kohana says all alone now.

*Psiko* · 01-24-2007, 01:25 AM

Since there is quite a bit to digest at this point in time, I'll not be reading and responding to all of this in just one sitting. My insanity does have its limits, after all. So, I'll be going episode by episode, posting/editing in my thoughts on each one individually, then following it all up with an overall impression. So, now that I have Episode One