Sunday Morning

[Testbug]

Once again, I wrote this at school. This time 1 A5 size story that is romantic and 1 A5 size story that is realistic. I put them together and here is the result.

Sunday Morning

There was beautiful Sunday morning when Max wake up.

Birds trill beautiful, sun was shining and every one was happy in that day.

Max stand up from bed and went to kitchen and saw his beautiful wife Lisa was cooking Max favorite breakfast : scrambled eggs
and bacon. Max smell that when he wake up. Max walked to the kitchen, kissed Lisa and watched to table. "Scrambled eggs and bacon, my favorite breakfast" Max ponder and sit down to the bench to eat his breakfast.

Max ate and read Daily Post, till Lisa sat down next to Max and gaved cup of coffee to Max. Max started put milk to coffee when it happen. Alarm clock started ring. It was only dream. Max woke up to terrible morning.

There was Sunday morning but it wasn't just like in dream. Max stand up to the bed and walked to the bathroom. In bathroom he opened medicine cabinet and toked headache pills. Max had terrible hangover because last night have stretch out. Max tried wobble to kitchen ot get some coffee. But no, coffee-pot was empty. That meant that Max shoul make coffee, but his hands shake so much that he couldn't make.

Max gave up and opened fridge hoped that there would be somthing that could make his condition to better. "Yahoo", Max shouted and thinked "At last something that makes my condition better". Max sawed applejuice can and drinked it only one gulp. "Now I'm hungry" Max sayed and sawed the sausage packet. Max ate it and went back to bed to sleep.

[postalblowfish7]

i liked it and here's why:

the broken english. it's more of a surreal abstract poem than a story if you ignore the fact that it was supposed to be more coherent. but when i read the line "At last something that makes my condition better" i must admit that i felt an emotional gravitation towards the story. no joke.

[Chez Daja]

Erm... It kinda scared me.

O____o



Out of curiousity, did Quina help you write it?

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Now, I wroted this al by myself. I inveted this idea when I saw by dad in hangover last sunday. I know that grammar is little bit bad but no, I wroted this story all by myself.

[hellbred]

I liked it. Short stories are neat, and this one had a nice little twist in it. You type well for someone living in Finland. I assume Enligsh is not the dominant language in Finland, so if that's what you've learned then props to you!

I couldn't speak, much less type one word in Finnish.

[Dragoon Joe]

thats nice man keep it up!

[Testbug]

Thanks Hellbred about that comment...

I can teach little bit of Finnish to everyone thats want to learn...

Just tell me and I make thread for studing...

[Dragoon Joe]

go on then, id like to learn another lanquage! thanks man.

[Testbug]

Alright everyone who wants learn Finnish...
Here's the Link

Here si the links

Well IMO, it was a good story but the grammer is a little off but toss that matter aside and you have a good story.

Nice one.