It's pretty good. I've worked with shots of eyes in tags before, and they can be pretty easy to do. Like RagnaToad, I think you should add a little colour.
I made a tag with eyes from Silent Hill 4's "Eileen Galvin". I made the colours lesser, but included scratches in her face as well as bloody eyes. A little colour can go a long, long way.
Other then that, it's pretty good.
